Gaurd Vs Chaos & Order

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Hey folks, the link above leads to a stroy I have written myself and it is based on the fallout universe, I would appreciate if any of you would review it (anyway you like, Constructive criticism would be best thought) I just hope you all enjoy it and mind the grammar mistakes, They are not that big ^^;

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very descriptive, which i like to see in a story. well done Hans

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nice job it hooked me into it and i like the fact its very discriptive

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Great job! I understand it pretty well because I had a lot of time playing Fallout 3. I would of had wrote my own Wasteland story by now, but i'm a ****ty writer.

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WHITESABBATH wrote:: very descriptive, which i like to see in a story. well done Hans

Off-topic post ahead!!!!

WHITESABBATH, I must say that your AV is unique. I never seen someone use a moving clown before.

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thanks for the kind comments, I am especially happy about how the 5th chapter came out